Did you enjoy your time as a student?

2022-04-07 · 첨삭 강사 Violet

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I think I didn\'t enjoy my campus life. I had been concerned about my future after graduation during that period. So I spent the most time in the library before or after class. The ways to prepare for the future were different, my friends\' hearts were the same. However, come to think of it, I was wrong. I should have enjoyed my campus life more. I should have experienced more, and challenged more although it didn\'t look helpful for my job preparation right now. What I regret the most is that I didn\'t take part in the program for the challenge to travel around the country on foot with other undergraduates. Participants were said to learn precious lessons that they couldn\'t learn from school during the program participation period. They could learn to challenge it against all the odds, how to control themselves, how to help each other during hard times, and how rewarding it is to complete an arduous task. Now I\'ll let my kids know how my campus life was, and advise them to enjoy it.

강사 첨삭

Hi Steve!

You were really quick to answer this one. I personally enjoy asking questions that will push my students to reminisce their past memories. Like your other outputs, this essay is also splendidly written! I only had one tiny suggestion to make one certain sentence clearer and better sounding.
Anyway, what is this program you wrote of? Wandering around the country on foot? That really is an arduous task! How many days, or maybe even weeks, did it take? Were the students funded, or did they use their own money? Did all universities offer this program? I hope you can elaborate on this one soon. 

As always, I am happy with your progress towards fluency. Your written outputs are only getting better.
See you soon!
-Teacher Violet.

I think I didn\'t enjoy my campus life. 
>> CORRECT!

I had been concerned about my future after graduation during that period. 
>> CORRECT!

So I spent the most time in the library before or after class. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> So I spent most of my time in the library before or after class. 

The ways to prepare for the future were different, my friends\' hearts were the same. 
>> CORRECT!

However, come to think of it, I was wrong. 
>> CORRECT!

I should have enjoyed my campus life more. 
>> CORRECT!

I should have experienced more, and challenged more although it didn\'t look helpful for my job preparation right now.
>> CORRECT!

What I regret the most is that I didn\'t take part in the program for the challenge to travel around the country on foot with other undergraduates. 
>> CORRECT!

Participants were said to learn precious lessons that they couldn\'t learn from school during the program participation period. 
>> CORRECT!

They could learn to challenge it against all the odds, how to control themselves, how to help each other during hard times, and how rewarding it is to complete an arduous task.
>> CORRECT!

Now I\'ll let my kids know how my campus life was, and advise them to enjoy it.
>> CORRECT!


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