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I think that the number of cases of the violation of privacy is increasing very quickly and trickily.
One of the the reason is because young generations are exposed excessively to distal media inclding noxious contents.
The responsibility of these social phenomena show the faiure of policy.
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Hi Ms. [이름]!
Insecurity and loss of trust can also be factors right? Thank you for sharing your thought, I get insights from you.
Have a great day!
Aki~
I think that the number of cases of the violation of privacy is increasing very quickly and trickily.
>>> I think that the number of cases of violation of privacy is increasing very quickly and trickily.
One of the the reason is because young generations are exposed excessively to distal media inclding noxious contents.
>>> One of the reasons is that young generations are exposed excessively to distal media including noxious content.
The responsibility of these social phenomena show the faiure of policy.
>>>The responsibility of these social phenomena shows the failure of policy.
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