digital gifting
학생이 쓴 원문
If we could not control our desire we end up excessive consumption.
There are too many new items and popular productions around us.
We cannot help spending our money more than we have or expect in the capitalistic society
So as possible as we can, we should try to reduce online shopping times itself
It is natural that we spend more money if we stay the longer in online shopping mall.
강사 첨삭
Ms. [이름]!
I understand you and agree with this! Unlike digital gifting in your country, we also like online shopping, where we buy something online and when it arrives to us we can wrap and gift it to the person. However, it does not defy the fact that we are also spending a lot of money on this.
Aki~
If we could not control our desire we end up excessive consumption.
>>> If we cannot control our desire, we end up with excessive consumption.
There are too many new items and popular productions around us.
>>> CORRECT!
We cannot help spending our money more than we have or expect in the capitalistic society.
>>> We cannot help spending our money more than we have or expect in a capitalistic society.
So as possible as we can, we should try to reduce online shopping times itself
>>> So as possible we can, we should try to reduce online shopping.
It is natural that we spend more money if we stay the longer in online shopping mall.
>>> It is natural that we spend more money if we stay longer in an online shopping mall.
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