Dilemma about immigration regulations.

2010-09-13 · 첨삭 강사 Nicole

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Korean goverment is trying to attract foreign travellers so that they eased immigration regulations. Meantime, it will hold a important meeting, which is G20. So, ahead of the meeting, it changed its attitute about immigration regulations in order to keep security. In my opinion, the most significant thing now is that to hold the meeting successfully and then we can care about enhancing travellers since if we fail to make the meeting successful, we are going to lose reputations all over the world. Furthermore, to get or to rebuild the reputation would be very difficult and cost a lot.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] Good day! Once again thank you for sharing your thought about this topic. I hope that you would have a great day despite of your busy schedule. I will be hearing from you again tomorrow. Thank you. Nicole   Korean goverment is trying to attract foreign travellers so that they eased immigration regulations. >> Korean government is trying to attract foreign travelers to ease immigration regulations. Meantime, it will hold a important meeting, which is G20. So, ahead of the meeting, it changed its attitute about immigration regulations in order to keep security. >> Meantime, it will hold an important meeting, which is G20. In the process, it changed its attitude about immigration regulations in order to keep security. In my opinion, the most significant thing now is that to hold the meeting successfully and then we can care about enhancing travellers since if we fail to make the meeting successful, we are going to lose reputations all over the world. >>In my opinion, the most significant thing now is to hold the meeting successfully and then we can care about enhancing travelers otherwise we are going to lose reputations all over the world. Furthermore, to get or to rebuild the reputation would be very difficult and cost a lot. >> Furthermore, to get or to rebuild the reputation would be very difficult and would cost a lot.    

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