Dinosaur

2021-04-27 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

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My favorite toy is dinosaur. First, I like dinosaur very much and dinosaur toy looks real. So I buy many toy and fight with each others. Also dinosaurs mouth moves. Second, I like big things. And dinosaur is big. And very scary. Like cars it\'s very small so l can\'t play long but dinosaur is interesting. and also big so l play with dinosaurs many times

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

It is so wonderful to see you here on the composition page!

I think that dinosaurs are very cool and fun toys to play with because of their size and fierce look. I hope that you can show me some of your dinosaur toys in class next time!

Thanks for this answer to my questions! See you again soon!

Take care. ^^

-T. Donna =)

My favorite toy is dinosaur.
>> Correct!

First, I like dinosaur very much and dinosaur toy looks real. 
>> First, I like the dinosaur very much and the dinosaur toy looks real. 

So I buy many toy and fight with each others. 
>> So I buy many toys and let them fight with each other. 

Also dinosaurs mouth moves.
>> Also, the dinosaur\'s mouth moves.

Second, I like big things. 
>> Correct!

And dinosaur is big. And very scary.
The dinosaur is very big and very scary.

 Like cars it\'s very small so l can\'t play long but dinosaur is interesting. and also big so l play with dinosaurs many times
>> Like cars, it\'s very small so l can\'t play long but the dinosaur is very interesting. Also, it is big so l play with dinosaurs many times.

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