Disadvantage at using a soap for cleansing
학생이 쓴 원문
I appreciated on your invitation to your daughter wedding cerimony in June. I am happy to hear your daugher and bride. Tom and I told that couple become well. Both of them are very smart and have the promising furte plane. Unfortunately, the parents of Tom has 50 anniversay on the same day and we cannot go to the wedding ceremony. But we are going to send presents. And after wedding, I would like to see photos. Take care. Send my celebration to happy couple. Some people aske me if it is ok to us soap as a facial cleanser.Flankly, I am surprised that peple don't know still this problem. A soap keeps pH of skin and remove protection to prevent from completely driness. since a soap remove the acid protection completely, skin need to make new one by itself. everytime you clean with a soap, your skin have to make again protection. so, your skin will lose its nutriation. therefore, after cleansing with a soap, you should use product with high moisture for skin not to get dry.
강사 첨삭
Hi Sophia!! Thank you for your composition. I provided you some corrections that would help you.
I\'ll see you tomorrow at our class. Enjoy your day today. Take care!!^^
__Teacher Nica__
I appreciated on your invitation to your daughter wedding cerimony in June.
>> I appreciate your invitation for your daughters\' wedding ceremony on June.
I am happy to hear your daugher and bride.
>> I am happy to hear that your daughter is getting married.
Tom and I told that couple become well.
>> Tom and I wish the couple all the best.
Both of them are very smart and have the promising furte plane.
>> Both of them are very smart and have a promising future.
Unfortunately, the parents of Tom has 50 anniversay on the same day and we cannot go to the wedding ceremony.
>> Unfortunately the parents of Tom will be celebrating their 50th anniversary on the same day and we cannot attend the wedding ceremony.
But we are going to send presents.
>> But we are going to send presents.
And after wedding, I would like to see photos.
>> After the wedding I would like to see the photos.
Take care.
>> Correct!
Send my celebration to happy couple.
>> Send my greetings to the happy couple.
Some people aske me if it is ok to us soap as a facial cleanser.
>> Some people asked me if it is okay to use soap as a facial cleanser.
Flankly, I am surprised that peple don\'t know still this problem.
>> Frankly I am surprised that people still have this kind ofproblem.
A soap keeps pH of skin and remove protection to prevent from completely driness.
>> A soap keeps the pH of skin and remove protection that prevents it from dryness.
since a soap remove the acid protection completely, skin need to make new one by itself.
>> Since a soap removes the acid protection completely, the skin need to make new one by itself.
everytime you clean with a soap, your skin have to make again protection.
>> Everytime you clean your face with soap your skin need to make again a protection.
so, your skin will lose its nutriation.
>> So, your skin will lose its nutrition.
therefore, after cleansing with a soap, you should use product with high moisture for skin not to get dry.
>> Therefore, after cleansing your face with soap you should use a product with high moisture for your skin not to get dry.
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