Discussion for Art Class
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Some people think that art is essential for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
When I was in high school, there were not many extra subjects such as art, music, and so on. Since many people think those extra subjects might not be helpful for the entire life, they just delete or make less time for them. However, according to an article I read before, learning extra subjects are really important to create creative ideas and get to their own thoughts. Especially, art would help the children to imagine wider and deeper thinking about some topics. In summary, I think to provide extra subjects including art in school is a necessary thing.
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Hi Jenna! ^ ^ Another homework of yours that I was not able to check immediately due to internet problems yesterday. So sorry for the delay. I hope you find time to read this today.
Thank you for taking the time in doing your homework and sharing your opinion on this one. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^ I definitely agree with you. Let\'s not kill the artistic side of children but rather hone them. Who knows what other benefits and advantages they could bring! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
When I was in high school, there were not many extra subjects such as art, music, and so on.
>>CORRECT
Since many people think those extra subjects might not be helpful for the entire life, they just delete or make less time for them.
>>Since many people think those extra subjects might not be helpful for their entire lives, they just delete or make less time for them.
However, according to an article I read before, learning extra subjects are really important to create creative ideas and get to their own thoughts.
>>CORRECT
Especially, art would help the children to imagine wider and deeper thinking about some topics.
>>Especially with art, it could help children have a wider and deeper imagination about certain things or topics.
In summary, I think to provide extra subjects including art in school is a necessary thing.
>>In summary, I think providing students with extra subjects like art in school is necessary.
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