Disease
학생이 쓴 원문
I haven’t get a big disease like cancer or similar things. But I had a liitle headache sometimes. I don’t know why this came to me but I think one of the reason is stress. Getting stress could make our body unhealth. So controlling our stress is so important to keep our body and psychological status healthy. Let’s seize our stress to get back our health
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
It\'s nice to read your work again.
I want to help you improve your writing skills, too.
Make sure that you use the right terms when making your sentences.
Refer to the corrections below.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I haven’t get a big disease like cancer or similar things.
>> I have never suffered from a serious disease like cancer or other similar things.
But I had a liitle headache sometimes.
>> I sometimes experience headaches.
I don’t know why this came to me but I think one of the reason is stress.
>> I don\'t know why it happens but I think one of the reasons is stress.
Getting stress could make our body unhealth.
>> Being stressed is not good for the body and our health.
So controlling our stress is so important to keep our body and psychological status healthy.
>> Therefore, managing stress is important to keep our body and psychological condition healthy.
Let’s seize our stress to get back our health
>> Let\'s get a hold of our stress and get back our health.
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