Divorce after retirement
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Some women dream of divorcing after retirement and living freely. Actually some go out from their family right after their children graduate from school or get married. I understand and support their decisions that they want to have a different and independent life. Focusing only on themselves is worth trying at least once ~
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Hi, Gi [이름]!
If we look at it, like you mentioned in class, I agree. If the families they are living in are traditional, where women do house chores and are not independent, then they would really want to live alone and independently in the future. It’s just sad for me because when I hear the word ‘divorce,’ it sounds like the person really got tired of being married.
- T. Caitlyn
Some women dream of divorcing after retirement and living freely.
>> CORRECT
Actually some go out from their family right after their children graduate from school or get married.
>> Actually, some leave their family right after their children graduate from school or get married.
I understand and support their decisions that they want to have a different and independent life.
>> I understand and support their decision to have a different and independent life.
Focusing only on themselves is worth trying at least once
>> CORRECT
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