Do human beings need to work to be happy?

2015-07-22 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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People should work to be happy. Let’s suppose that we don’t have jobs. For what and how will we spend time? Can we travel 365 days? Can we go shopping 7 days a week? Yes, we can, but we might feel unhappy doing them. Too much work drains our energy and can devastate our life. However, no work can also make us feel dull and spend our days in a state of torpor. Many studies show that people live longer and healthier when they work even after retirement. Maintaining a work-life balance is of critical importance. Even if you do not work, we need to be engaged in other community activities, so we can socialize with other people. As a human being that is a social animal, we cannot live by ourselves, being isolated from others. Having a job is not only for earning money to have fool, shelter and clothes, but also makes us feel alive. Leisure time is much valued when you secure it between jobs. Aristotle even stated that we work to have leisure, which could be too extreme.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]. ^^

Thank you for your time.

Yes, we should maintain a work-life balance.

It is really important to have some time for leisure too.

Anyway, we can talk more about this topic in class.

Teacher Nina


People should work to be happy.

>> correct

Let’s suppose that we don’t have jobs.

>> correct

For what and how will we spend time?

>>  For what and how will we spend our time?

Can we travel 365 days? 

>> correct

Can we go shopping 7 days a week? 

>> correct

Yes, we can, but we might feel unhappy doing them.

>> correct

Too much work drains our energy and can devastate our life.

>> correct

However, no work can also make us feel dull and spend our days in a state of torpor.

>> correct

Many studies show that people live longer and healthier when they work even after retirement.

>> correct

Maintaining a work-life balance is of critical importance.

>> correct

Even if you do not work, we need to be engaged in other community activities, so we can socialize with other people.

>> correct

As a human being that is a social animal, we cannot live by ourselves, being isolated from others.

>> correct

Having a job is not only for earning money to have fool, shelter and clothes, but also makes us feel alive.

>> correct

Leisure time is much valued when you secure it between jobs.

>> correct

Aristotle even stated that we work to have leisure, which could be too extreme.

>> correct

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