Do human beings need to work to be happy?
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Hello Sir [이름]. ^^
Thank you for your time.
Yes, we should maintain a work-life balance.
It is really important to have some time for leisure too.
Anyway, we can talk more about this topic in class.
Teacher Nina
People should work to be happy.
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Let’s suppose that we don’t have jobs.
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For what and how will we spend time?
>> For what and how will we spend our time?
Can we travel 365 days?
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Can we go shopping 7 days a week?
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Yes, we can, but we might feel unhappy doing them.
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Too much work drains our energy and can devastate our life.
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However, no work can also make us feel dull and spend our days in a state of torpor.
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Many studies show that people live longer and healthier when they work even after retirement.
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Maintaining a work-life balance is of critical importance.
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Even if you do not work, we need to be engaged in other community activities, so we can socialize with other people.
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As a human being that is a social animal, we cannot live by ourselves, being isolated from others.
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Having a job is not only for earning money to have fool, shelter and clothes, but also makes us feel alive.
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Leisure time is much valued when you secure it between jobs.
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Aristotle even stated that we work to have leisure, which could be too extreme.
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