Do men or women have more freedom in your country? Is everyone in your country equally free?
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Good afternoon Sir [이름]. ^^
Yahoo. ^^ We surpassed the first two days. Hihihi.
I totally agree with the things you wrote below.
A woman should really behave in the way people want.
Even in terms of opportunities, men have more than women.
We can talk more about this in class.
It is an interesting topic.
Teacher Nina
From regulation perspective, there is no inequality or discrimination against gender in our society.
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Actually, things have changed a lot compared with ten or twenty years ago when it comes to women’s social status, equal opportunity, and participation in the social and economic activities.
>> Actually, things have changed a lot compared from ten or twenty years ago when it comes to women’s social status, equal opportunity, and participation in the social and economic activities.
However, like other developed western countries, there is a glass ceiling for women at the workplace in Korea.
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Moreover, there is a stereo-type perception toward men and women, which prevails in the society.
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For instance, parents are more generous for their sons to stay outside overnight or even to drink or smoke, while they do not allow their daughters to do the same things.
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Girls are still educated and expected by their parents and society to behave cautiously, which restricts their freedom just because they are women.
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Even when studying abroad, many girls still have a hard time to get approval from their parents.
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People are still more critical woman for their wrong-doings like smoking.
>> Did you mean: It is critical for a woman to do wrong-doings like smoking.
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