Do mobile/computer games teach children violence? Why or why not?
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I think that a mobile or computer game can be violent for children.
>>> I think mobile games or computer games can teach children violence.
Not granting responsibility in virtual reality as a game, the children can not recognize how much is it dangerous.
>>> Not granting responsibility to virtual games, children cannot recognize how dangerous they are.
Of course, there are also good games that can learn good things, but highly addictive games like war have a harmful effect on children.
>>> Of course, there are also good games that can teach good things, but highly addictive like war games that can have a harmful effect on children.
Therefore, their parental’s confirmed and observation must need when the child plays games.
>>> Therefore, parental guidance is needed when children play these games.
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