Do not waste time.

2018-03-22 · 첨삭 강사 Anne

학생이 쓴 원문

Mahatma Gandhi said that the future depends on what we do in the present. We have to save our time. How we spend time makes our lives finally. If we spend our time diligently, constructively ,for example, on studying, reading a book, exercising, we will be intelligent, healthy people. But if we spend all time playing games, sleeping, we will not be the ones who we want to become. Do not waste your time to live better life.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!
You\'re very diligent when it comes to doing your homework! Keep up the good work!
Thank you and I hope that the corrections provided will be helpful for you.
See you later!
T. Anne^^

Mahatma Gandhi said that the future depends on what we do in the present.
>>CORRECT!
We have to save our time.
>>CORRECT!
How we spend time makes our lives finally.
>>How we spend our time determines our lives.
If we spend our time diligently, constructively ,for example, on studying, reading a book, exercising, we will be intelligent, healthy people.
>>If we spend our time diligently and constructively; for example, on studying, reading books and exercising we will be intelligent and healthy.
But if we spend all time playing games, sleeping, we will not be the ones who we want to become.
>>But if we spend all of our time on just playing games and sleeping, we will not be the ones we wanted to be.
Do not waste your time to live better life.
>>Do not waste your time so that you can live a better life.

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