Do people have less goals as they get older?
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It could depend on people. In general, however, people have more goals when they are young.
As we get older, there are more things we have to give up on because we are responsible for more things. Also our life gets more complicated and our goals become - or have to be - simple such as saving more money, getting promotion.
During the teen years, there are many options to try and teens afford the time to do it. Their goals could be to go to Paris, take a course in sugar craft, take up painting. On the contrary, there are many limits to grown ups. For example, if you have kids, it is hard to go on a Paris trip. if you work late into the evening everyday, it is unlikely to learn sugar craft.
Moreover, as we get older, we become more realistic. We learn that goals such as to be a president or to go to the moon are more likely to dreams of. When young people start things impulsively, old people make plans and think it over before they take action, which will filter unnecessary goals.
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It could depend on people.
>> It depends on the person.
In general, however, people have more goals when they are young.
>> Howver in general, people have more goals when they are young. As we get older, there are more things we have to give up on because we are responsible for more things.
>> Correct!
>> OR: As we get older, there are things that we have to give up on because we have to focus on more things.
Also our life gets more complicated and our goals become - or have to be - simple such as saving more money, getting promotion.
>> Correct!
>> OR: Our life also gets more complicated and our goals become more simple such as saving more money and getting a promotion. During the teen years, there are many options to try and teens afford the time to do it.
>> Correct!
Their goals could be to go to Paris, take a course in sugar craft, take up painting.
>> Correct!
>> OR: Their golas could be traveling to Paris, takicng a course in sugar craft or taking up painting.
On the contrary, there are many limits to grown ups.
>> Correct!
>> OR: On the other hand, there are a lot of limits for grown ups.
For example, if you have kids, it is hard to go on a Paris trip.
>> For example, if you have kinds, it is hard to go on a trip to Paris.
if you work late into the evening everyday, it is unlikely to learn sugar craft.
>> If you work late at night everyday, it is unlikely to learn sugar craft. Moreover, as we get older, we become more realistic.
>> Correct!
We learn that goals such as to be a president or to go to the moon are more likely to dreams of.
>> Correct!
When young people start things impulsively, old people make plans and think it over before they take action, which will filter unnecessary goals.
>> Correct!
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