Do people need to be punished? Why?

2024-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Chammy

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Well, I think it\'s a profound topic. Educatively and philosophically speaking, it makes people realize that it\'s wrong something or behavior. Because it can make people recognize that something is wrong by doing something wrong and being punished. In doing so, it can socialize humans and refine their nature. Politically and socially speaking, it can instill fear in people. It can build a fear through those who are punished and send a strong message through that fear. However, this is probably the way it works in countries with dictators or long-term rule.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!~
Human rights may be violated by punishment for the opinions of others. However, if you are a victim, you want the criminal to receive the penalty he deserves. I agree with what you mentioned, there are some things that truly require punishment in order for people to realize their mistakes. 
Chammy
Well, I think it\'s a profound topic.
>>Correct
Educatively and philosophically speaking, it makes people realize that it\'s wrong something or behavior.
>>  Educatively and philosophically speaking, it makes people realize that it is something wrong or a behavior.
Because it can make people recognize that something is wrong by doing something wrong and being punished.
>> Because when someone does something wrong and gets punished, it can help them realize that something is wrong.
In doing so, it can socialize humans and refine their nature.
>>Correct
Politically and socially speaking, it can instill fear in people.
OR
>> It can make people fearful in social and political contexts.
It can build a fear through those who are punished and send a strong message through that fear. However, this is probably the way it works in countries with dictators or long-term rule.
OR
>> It can instill fear in those who get punished and use that fear to convey a powerful message. Nonetheless, this is most likely how things operate in countries with long-term governance or dictatorial governments.

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