Do people need to change the way they think for the world to be peaceful?

2019-02-20 · 첨삭 강사 Tricia

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I think that it\'s necessary to change how we think for the world to be peaceful. Well, some may say that we already know how to be peaceful, but we just don\'t put it in to practice. But I don\'t think so. Since all those thoughts that intimidate \'peace\' is deeply rooted in humen\'s negative state, like hatred,anger,greed,frustration,fear, arrogance, ignorance,..... . And those things are incarnated in form of bias, wars, conflict, and even meaningless harms in someone\'s heart. These are so original part of human beings that it won\'t be just easily defeated by \"practice\" of good thoughts. You should dive in to that deep-looted dark perspectives, and find an origin of it. But reflecting ourselves is painstaking for everybody. That\'s why there should be philosophers, priests, artists, good-hearted people who are aware of our own demons. By praying, seeking for truth, art, legit democartic ways, and at last \"practice\" or for the same word,\"love\", we can be truly peaceful.

강사 첨삭

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- Teacher Tricia


I think that it\'s necessary to change how we think for the world to be peaceful.

>> CORRECT!


Well, some may say that we already know how to be peaceful, but we just don\'t put it in to practice.

>> Well, some may say that we already know how to be peaceful, but we just don\'t put it in a practice.


But I don\'t think so. Since all those thoughts that intimidate \'peace\' is deeply rooted in humen\'s negative state, like hatred,anger,greed,frustration,fear, arrogance, ignorance,..... .

>> But I don\'t think so. Since all those thoughts that intimidate \'peace\' is deeply rooted in human\'s negative state. Such as; hatred, anger, greed, frustration ,fear, arrogance and ignorance.


And those things are incarnated in form of bias, wars, conflict, and even meaningless harms in someone\'s heart.

>> And those things are incarnated in  the form of bias, wars, conflict, and even meaningless harms in someone\'s heart.


These are so original part of human beings that it won\'t be just easily defeated by \"practice\" of good thoughts.

>> CORRECT!


You should dive in to that deep-looted dark perspectives, and find an origin of it. But reflecting ourselves is painstaking for everybody.

>> You should dive in to that deep-looted dark perspectives, and find the origin of it. But reflecting ourselves is painstaking for everybody.


That\'s why there should be philosophers, priests, artists, good-hearted people who are aware of our own demons.

>> CORRECT!


By praying, seeking for truth, art, legit democartic ways, and at last \"practice\" or for the same word,\"love\", we can be truly peaceful.

>> By praying, seeking for truth, art, legit democratic ways, and at last \"practice\" or for the same word \"love\" we can be truly peaceful. 

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