Do people need to compare themselves with others in order to appreciate what they have?

2014-06-02 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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We sometimes need to compare ourselves with others in order to realize how fortunate and thankful we are for what we have and for what we are. We do not realize how grateful it is to have a daily routine without any serious incidents or misfortune. Waking up every morning on our bed, being with those we love and being able to eat food are somethign that some people wish to do. We often forget the true value of what we have and we tend to take them for granted until we lose them. Comparing ourselves with those who are better than us in terms of economy and social status can make us feel depressed, miserable, and unsatisfied with our life. So, we need to look at those who have less and are the under privileged. There are so many people in the world who are struggling to survive a day because of no food, no water, and no basic medical supplies. We have to learn that it is up to us whether to live a happy life or not. We should be thankful for our life although it is not always perfect.

강사 첨삭

Sir [이름]!

What a great composition!

It was an inspiring essay.
Thanks for sending this today.

I had a wonderful start.

I totally agree with you. We should not forget that we should always appreciate what we have.

So, thanks again for being my student.
I hope that you will have a fruitful month ahead of you.
Teacher Nina

 

We sometimes need to compare ourselves with others in order to realize how fortunate and thankful we are for what we have and for what we are.

>> Correct!

We do not realize how grateful it is to have a daily routine without any serious incidents or misfortune.

>> Correct!

Waking up every morning on our bed, being with those we love and being able to eat food are somethign that some people wish to do.

>> Correct! ( spelling check: something ^^)

We often forget the true value of what we have and we tend to take them for granted until we lose them.

>> Correct!

Comparing ourselves with those who are better than us in terms of economy and social status can make us feel depressed, miserable, and unsatisfied with our life.

>> Correct!

So, we need to look at those who have less and are the under privileged.

>> So, we need to look at those who have less and the under privileged.

There are so many people in the world who are struggling to survive a day because of no food, no water, and no basic medical supplies.

>> Correct!

We have to learn that it is up to us whether to live a happy life or not.

>> Correct!

We should be thankful for our life although it is not always perfect.

>> Correct!

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