Do people spend too much time and money on beauty?

2018-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Elisha

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yes i think so. unlike men, women spend too much times on beauty. but i'm no exception :(. different people have different values, i think that fact isn't bad thing, because i wanna spend my 20s times beautifully. so i wanna make double eyelid used by plastic surgery.....

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! I personally think that you are beautiful because you have a kind heart. Thank you for sending me your homework. I enjoyed reading your ideas. See you! ~T. Elisha ^^
yes i think so.
>> CORRECT!
OR: >> Yes, I think so.
unlike men, women spend too much times on beauty.
>>Unlike men, women spend too much time on beauty.
but i\'m no exception :(.
>> I\'m no exception.
different people have different values, i think that fact isn\'t bad thing, because i wanna spend my 20s times beautifully.
>> Different people have different values, I think this fact isn\'t a bad thing. I just want to be beautiful in my 20s.
so i wanna make double eyelid used by plastic surgery.....
>> I want to undergo a surgery to have double eyelids.

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