Do people spend too much time and money on beauty nowadays?

2017-04-18 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

I agree with the statement. There are two reasons why. The first reason is that we have free time these day more than past, so we can spend time and money for our appearance. The second reason is that there are a lot of popular and famouse stars. We hope to be more beautiful and handsome like them, so we try to do that and spend much money. As a result, I agree with that for these reasons.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Thank you for sending this in. I agree that people have become more conscious about their appearance, so they spend much money to look more beautiful and handsome.^^

~Kelly^^

I agree with the statement. There are two reasons why.

>> Correct.
The first reason is that we have free time these day more than past, so we can spend time and money for our appearance.

>> The first reason is that we have free time these days more than the past, so we can spend time and money for our appearance.
The second reason is that there are a lot of popular and famouse stars.

>> The second reason is that there are a lot of popular and famous stars.

We hope to be more beautiful and handsome like them, so we try to do that and spend much money.

>> Correct.
As a result, I agree with that for these reasons.

>> Correct.

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