Do success and happiness depend on the choices people make rather than on factors beyond their contr
학생이 쓴 원문
Sometime, unpredict case like lottery or fortune make our life diffrent.
And To success, fortune is necessary.
But i think we can get fortune by my effort. For example, we can get unpredict chance in work. But if we don't have prepared when we meet this chance, we naver get the chance and this fortune go to other person. And i belive my effort never turn me back.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts!
Some say that happiness is not just consequential to people\'s choice but also to factors beyond control.
However, making the right choice also plays an important role.
What we choose now can determine our future and happiness. Thus, choosing carefully is really important.
Take care!
~Teacher Shanee
Sometime, unpredict case like lottery or fortune make our life diffrent.
>>> Sometimes, unpredictable happenings like winning the lottery or inhereting a fortune make our life different.And To success, fortune is necessary.
>>> And to become successful, luck is necessary.But i think we can get fortune by my effort.
>>> But I think we can have a good luck if we exert some effort.
For example, we can get unpredict chance in work.
>>> For example, we can have a better opportunity at work.
But if we don\'t have prepared when we meet this chance, we naver get the chance and this fortune go to other person.
>>> But if we are not prepared and we missed this opportunity, we might never get another chance and it might go to another person.
And i belive my effort never turn me back.
>>> And I believe that my effort will not fail me.
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