Do teenagers have a higher tendency to commit suicide than adults?
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Hello [이름]. Thank you for this one. I appreciate the effort. You\'re right. Teenagers are very emotional and they are quite sensitive during this stage.
- T. Beth
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I agree that teenagers have a higher tendency to commit suicide than adults.
>>> CORRECT.
Because teenagers are in an adolescence period.
>>> CORRECT.
So they are moody, and they can’t be controlled their feeling by themselves.
>>> So they are moody, and they can’t control their feelings by themselves.
The reason is that most behaviors and feelings came from hormone action.
>>> OR: The reason is that most behaviors and feelings came from hormonal activities.
It means that hormone dominate the period of teenagers.
>>> CORRECT.
Hence, we can guess that they have the tough time to decide something.
>>> CORRECT.
>>> Hence, we can guess that they have a tough time to decide on something.
Since they don’t know what is their own feeling and what is not.
>>> CORRECT.
Their feeling is shaking too much, then it means that they are easy to change their mood so quickly.
>>> OR: Their emotions are unstable. It means that their mood could change quickly.
Also, their mood can reach both the most happiness and the worst deepest gloom.
>>> Also, their mood can reach both to the happiest and the gloomiest state.
It is one of the characters in adolescences.
>>> CORRECT.
Therefore, if they are in the mood of deepest gloom, it is easier to kill themselves than adults.
>>> OR: Therefore, if they are in their gloomiest mood, it is easier to kill themselves than adults.
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