Do violent images, music, and games cause people to act out violently?
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I think that violent images, musics, and games cause people to act out violently.
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These days, not only adolescents but also adults are addicted to violent games.
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They sometimes cannot distinguish reality and fantasy.
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For example, There was an american boy who was addicted to a game which uses guns to kill each other.
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When he was annoyed, he lost his control, and he run out to the square with his gun.
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Then he shot any people.
>> Then he shot many people.
This case shows us very certain evidence that violent games give us negative effect.
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Not only violent games, but images or music make us act out violently.
>> Not only violent games, but also images or music make us act out violently.
They make us think violently, and lose our control.
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That\'s why I think violent images, music, and games bring people to behave violently.
>> Correct.
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