Do works of art have the power to change people's lives?
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I think works of art don\'t have the power to change people\'s lives.
>> CORRECT!
First of all, works of art are artifical that is not usually from real stories.
>> First of all, works of art are artificial and are not usually from real stories.
What I mean is that works of art are man-made so people can get impressed from them.
>> CORRECT!
However, it cannot influence their life becasue everyone knows that the writers made them artificially.
>> CORRECT!
Usually works of art are too fantastic rather than realistic so it doesn\'t work in the real world.
>> Usually, works of art are too fantastic rather than realistic so it doesn\'t work in the real world.
Also, works of art are limited to explain lives of whole world.
>> Also, works of art are limited to explain living conditions in the whole world.
For example, since they are not real stories, the writers should make borders to express them.
>> CORRECT!
It means works of art have their own limitations but the world we live has no limitations that our lives don\'t finish for short time like moives or books.
>> It means works of art have their own limitations but the world we live in has no limitations. Our lives don\'t last for a short time unlike in movies or books.
For these reasons, I think works of art don\'t have the power to change people\'s lives but they can affect people\'s lives a little bit.
>> For these reasons, I think works of art don\'t have the power to change people\'s lives but they can affect people\'s lives a little.
OR >> For these reasons, I think works of art don\'t have the power to change people\'s lives but they can affect people\'s lives a bit.
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