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2017-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I have heard a story regarding of two guys who have a drunken father. A first child became a rum-dum as his father since he blamed all his circumstance to his father. On the other hand, a second child became a celebrity because he only saw father’s positive views and he didn’t do bad things that he experienced from his father. He made a greater effort to change his life style. Hence, He didn’t drink alcohol and gamble. Furthermore, he concentrated to study and didn’t be lazy. Even if they learned from same father, the brothers lived totally different life. But I think it applies few people only due to reasons below. First, I have read that children’s behavior was made by when they were young and from their parents. Furthermore, there is an adage in Korea “as one saws, so shall he reap”. Second, Jews who have ethnic group with an influential power in the world even if they are few teach their child on the table while they have meals. Their children learn a lot of knowledge called Talmud from their parents. Therefore, I agree with 80 percent and disagree with the left.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much, Jason^^

I highly believe that parents create a strong impact on their children~

That\'s why we have to work hard and do our best to give them a bright future with sound knowledge^^

See you!

I have heard a story regarding of two guys who have a drunken father.

>>I have heard a story regarding two guys who have a drunken father.

A first child became a rum-dum as his father since he blamed all his circumstance to his father.

>>The first child became a rum-dum as his father since he blamed all his circumstances to his father.
 On the other hand, a second child became a celebrity because he only saw father’s positive views and he didn’t do bad things that he experienced from his father.

>> On the other hand, the second child became a celebrity because he only saw his father’s positive views and he didn’t do the bad things that he experienced from his father.
 He made a greater effort to change his life style.

>> He made a greater effort to change his lifestyle.

Hence, He didn’t drink alcohol and gamble.

>>Hence, he didn’t drink alcohol and gamble.

 Furthermore, he concentrated to study and didn’t be lazy.

>>Furthermore, he concentrated on studying and didn’t become lazy.

 Even if they learned from same father, the brothers lived totally different life. 

>>Even if they learned from same father, the brothers lived a totally different life. 
 But I think it applies few people only due to reasons below.

>> But I think it only applies to a few people due to the reasons below.
 First, I have read that children’s behavior was made by when they were young and from their parents.

>> First, I have read that children’s behavior was made by when they were young and taken care by their parents.

Furthermore, there is an adage in Korea “as one saws, so shall he reap”.

>>Furthermore, there is an adage in Korea, “as one sows, so shall he reap”.
Second, Jews who have ethnic group with an influential power in the world even if they are few teach their child on the table while they have meals.

>>Second, Jews ,an ethnic group with an influential power in the world even if they are few, teach their child on the table while they have meals.

Their children learn a lot of knowledge called Talmud from their parents.

>>CORRECT!
 Therefore, I agree with 80 percent and disagree with the left.

>>CORRECT!

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