Do you agree that a kid\'s accomplishment is the parent\'s accomplishment as well? Why or Why not?
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I agree that a kid\'s accomplishment is the parent\'s accomplishment as well. Most kids gain senses of accomplishment through their growth from birth. They can make eye contact with their parents, turn their bodies upside down, sit down, stand, walk, and run. In this process, their parents feel a sense of accomplishment as well. In addition, children experience emotions of joy, anger, love, sadness, and despair in their lives, and parents also feel these emotions and grow up together.
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Hi Jamie,
It was nice reading your composition. You did well! :)
~ T. Demi ^^
It was nice reading your composition. You did well! :)
~ T. Demi ^^
CORRECT!
Most kids gain senses of accomplishment through their growth from birth.
>> Most kids gain a sense of accomplishment through their growth from birth.
>> Most kids gain a sense of accomplishment through their growth from birth.
They can make eye contact with their parents, turn their bodies upside down, sit down, stand, walk, and run.
CORRECT!
CORRECT!
In this process, their parents feel a sense of accomplishment as well.
CORRECT!
OR>> This process also brings a sense of accomplishment to their parents.
CORRECT!
OR>> This process also brings a sense of accomplishment to their parents.
In addition, children experience emotions of joy, anger, love, sadness, and despair in their lives, and parents also feel these emotions and grow up together.
>> In addition, children experience a range of emotions including joy, anger, love, sadness, and despair in their lives, and parents also share these emotions as they grow together.
>> In addition, children experience a range of emotions including joy, anger, love, sadness, and despair in their lives, and parents also share these emotions as they grow together.
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