Do you agree that companies should be fined if they don’t provide the correct equipment regardless o
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Regardless of gender, it is a corporate duty to provide all available gadgets. Therefore, the company should be fined if they do not provide adequate equipment for all employees, especially for those requiring perilous tasks. Since construction and manufacturing sites have long been regarded as masculine tasks, an exponential gender gap led to a scarcity of gears targeting female workers. However, as mentioned in the articles, there is rising interest, and the shortage of foreign workforce showed the increase of female workers. Therefore, it is now inevitable for companies to prepare all necessary equipment. It could still be the transition period for many workplaces, so governmental bodies must oversee such a shift. Korean officials are notorious for not investing efficient resources until the significant incidents. It is evident from the articles that there are issues with the safety gadget. Accordingly, government agencies should closely monitor the sites.
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Regardless of gender, it is a corporate duty to provide all available gadgets.
>>> correct
Therefore, the company should be fined if they do not provide adequate equipment for all employees, especially for those requiring perilous tasks.
>>> correct
Since construction and manufacturing sites have long been regarded as masculine tasks, an exponential gender gap led to a scarcity of gears targeting female workers.
>>> correct
However, as mentioned in the articles, there is rising interest, and the shortage of foreign workforce showed the increase of female workers.
>>> However, as mentioned in the articles, there is a rising interest, and the shortage of foreign workforce showed the increase of female workers.
Therefore, it is now inevitable for companies to prepare all necessary equipment.
>>> correct
It could still be the transition period for many workplaces, so governmental bodies must oversee such a shift.
>>> correct
Korean officials are notorious for not investing efficient resources until the significant incidents.
>>> Korean officials are notorious for not investing in efficient resources until the significant incidents.
It is evident from the articles that there are issues with the safety gadget.
>>> correct
Accordingly, government agencies should closely monitor the sites.
>>> correct
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