Do you agree that drugs and alcohol consumption are the main causes of homelessness? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Not really but most of people become like it. It\'s because many homelessness people don\'t have their child or wife because of economic and any other things. So they find some drugs or alcohols. And they become violently. Some homelessness people try to suicide because of depression. This case is so sad. I dream many homeless people become healthy by some cure of government so that they don\'t get sick anymore.
강사 첨삭
Good evening Daisy. :)
Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts about this.
Every year, more and more people become homeless due to economic constraints.
It is sad to see them become homeless and many of them turn to drugs and alcohol to prevent their problems.
I pray that they find a good home for themselves too and that the government will help them to get out of homeless ness.
See you in class later. Take care always. :)
~Teacher Charry
Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts about this.
Every year, more and more people become homeless due to economic constraints.
It is sad to see them become homeless and many of them turn to drugs and alcohol to prevent their problems.
I pray that they find a good home for themselves too and that the government will help them to get out of homeless ness.
See you in class later. Take care always. :)
~Teacher Charry
>> Not really but most people become homeless because of those.
It\'s because many homelessness people don\'t have their child or wife because of economic and any other things.
>> It\'s because many homeless people don\'t have children or spouse, mainly because of economic constraints and other reasons.
So they find some drugs or alcohols.
>> So, they turn to drugs or alcohol.
And they become violently.
>> As a result, they become violent.
Some homelessness people try to suicide because of depression.
>> Some homeless people try to commit suicide because of depression.
This case is so sad.
>> CORRECT!
I dream many homeless people become healthy by some cure of government so that they don\'t get sick anymore.
>> I pray that many homeless people become healthy and the government will help them so they don\'t get sick anymore.
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