Do you agree that Korean elderly are becoming increasingly independent and active when it comes to e
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After the economic development, the elderly get rich and they can live without their children\'s help. Or they could work to be independent. The elderly is not that old compared to the past. After retiring they start to 2nd life.
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After the economic development, the elderly get rich and they can live without their children\'s help. Or they could work to be independent.
>> After the economic development, the elderly get rich and they can live without their children\'s help or they could work to be independent.
The elderly is not that old compared to the past. After retiring they start to 2nd life.
>> The elderly is not that old compared to the past. After retiring they start to live a new life.
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