Do you agree that loneliness and social isolation are twice as harmful to physical and mental health
학생이 쓴 원문
 The feeling is subjective and you can enjoy our life by yourself. However, once you feel the necessity of someone beside you and want to share your things with the others, though you can’t do this at that moment, then, you would get some negative feelings, like emptiness, meaninglessness, and langathy.  These emotions make you lose your energy to challenge new things in your life or to come out from bad habits. Finally, this lets you ruin yourself not only for a psychological health, but also for a physical part.
 Nonetheless, some people are satisfied in their calm and peaceful life apart from the others, when they are captured by these native thoughts, being with family or close friends might be much easier to get away from them.
 Loneliness might seem a swamp to stick onto our soles. Usually, it doesn’t bother us, but sometimes we are tired and feel some burdens of life, it would pull us down more strongly, not to move forward in every aspect of our lives.
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Do you agree that loneliness and social isolation are twice as harmful to physical and mental health?
The feeling is subjective and you can enjoy our life by yourself.
>>The feeling is subjective, and you can enjoy your life by yourself.
However, once you feel the necessity of someone beside you and want to share your things with the others, though you can’t do this at that moment, then, you would get some negative feelings, like emptiness, meaninglessness, and langathy.
>>However, once you feel the necessity of having someone beside you, and want to share your things with them, though, you can’t do this at the moment, then you will get some negative feelings like emptiness and meaninglessness.
These emotions make you lose your energy to challenge new things in your life or to come out from bad habits.
>>These emotions make you lose your energy to challenge new things in your life or to cut out your bad habits.
Finally, this lets you ruin yourself not only for a psychological health, but also for a physical part.
>>Finally, this lets you ruin yourself not only for your psychological health but also physically.
Nonetheless, some people are satisfied in their calm and peaceful life apart from the others, when they are captured by these native thoughts, being with family or close friends might be much easier to get away from them.
>>Nonetheless, some people are satisfied in their calm and peaceful life apart from others.
When they are captured by these native thoughts, staying away from family or close friends might be much easier for them.
Loneliness might seem a swamp to stick onto our soles.
>>Loneliness might seem a swamp to stick onto our souls.
Usually, it doesn’t bother us, but sometimes we are tired and feel some burdens of life, it would pull us down more strongly, not to move forward in every aspect of our lives.
>>Usually, it doesn’t bother us, but sometimes, we are tired and feel burdened in our life, and it will pull us down stronger, instead of pushing us forward in every aspect of our lives.
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