Do you agree that money makes the world go around?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I think so.
I think money is one of the most important elements that connect the world.
As money moves around the world, human abilities and natural resources are also able to move around the world,
leading to further development of humans.
From point of view of the development of human civilization,
it seems that the love of money is not necessarily a bad thing.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jennifer:)
Money is very important in our lives but we shouldn\'t let it control us, especially our happiness. :)
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Yes, I think so.
>> CORRECT
I think money is one of the most important elements that connect the world.
>> CORRECT
As money moves around the world, human abilities and natural resources are also able to move around the world, leading to further development of humans.
>> CORRECT
From point of view of the development of human civilization, it seems that the love of money is not necessarily a bad thing.
>> From that point of view of the development of human civilization, it seems that the love of money is not necessarily a bad thing.
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