Do you agree that older people are less happy? Why are teenagers some of the happiest people in the

2014-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I do agree that older people are less happy than young people. I envy youth. Although Korean teenagers have to go through the toughest time to prepare for the college entrance exam, I still think that they are happy because they have a future and potential. Being young is like a sheet of white paper. They can draw anything they want to. They can dream of whatever they want to be. The young have all their options open, and can still achieve great things. They can try everything. Even if they fail, they still have a chance to get on their feet again. Some people say that you have your own happiness regardless of how old you are. As getting older, you lose a lot such as stiffening joints, weakening muscles, fading eyesight and the clouding of memory, but at the same time, there are things you can gain. However, recalling the past, my youth was bright and cherishable although I was unstable, lonely and not determined what to do. I still wish that I could go back and do better.

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Good day Sir [이름]! I envy the younger ones, it is because they can have a lot of things. As you mentioned, they have a lot of options and chances to do better. But we should not give up. We can still have what we want, we just have to fight for it. I hope that you are having a great day. ^^ I can\'t wait to talk you. Teacher Nina   I do agree that older people are less happy than young people. >> Correct>> OR: I agree that older people are less happpy than younger ones. I envy youth. >> I envy the youth. >> OR: I envy the younger generation. Although Korean teenagers have to go through the toughest time to prepare for the college entrance exam, I still think that they are happy because they have a future and potential. >> Correct >> OR: Although Korean teenagers have to go through the toughest time to prepare for their college entrance exam, I still think that they are happy because they have a future and potential to be successful. Being young is like a sheet of white paper. >> Correct They can draw anything they want to. >> Correct They can dream of whatever they want to be. >> Correct The young have all their options open, and can still achieve great things. >> Correct >> OR: The young have a lot of options and they can achieve their goals. They can try everything. >> Correct Even if they fail, they still have a chance to get on their feet again. >> Correct Some people say that you have your own happiness regardless of how old you are. >> Correct As getting older, you lose a lot such as stiffening joints, weakening muscles, fading eyesight and the clouding of memory, but at the same time, there are things you can gain. >> As we get older, we experience a lot such as stiffening joints, weakening muscles, fading eyesight and the clouding of memory, but at the same time, there are things you can gain. However, recalling the past, my youth was bright and cherishable although I was unstable, lonely and not determined what to do. >> However, recalling the past, my youth was bright and cherishable although I was unstable, lonely ad not determined on what to do. I still wish that I could go back and do better. >> Correct

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