Do you agree that people’s interests are mostly shaped by their environment?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes. Personal interest can be affected by one\'s environment. Because most of people have mob phychology, when people around us interest something new, we might interest and have curious about it. For example, if my friends start a new hobby and have a conversation with me, I have to listen about that hobby. And, for having more talking with my friends, I should know about it. This situation make us to be interest.
강사 첨삭
Hi. Mary! Your answer clearly explains how the environment and social influence can shape people’s interests. I like how you used a simple and relatable example about friends and hobbies, which makes your point easy to understand. Your reasoning flows naturally from social influence to curiosity and shared conversations. To improve, focus on vocabulary and grammar such as “group psychology,” “become interested,” and smoother sentence structures. Overall, your response is logical, relatable, and well-organized, great job!
-Teacher Wela
Yes. Personal interest can be affected by one\'s environment.
>> Yes. Personal interests can be affected by one’s environment.
Because most of people have mob phychology, when people around us interest something new, we might interest and have curious about it.
>> Because most people are influenced by group psychology, when people around us become interested in something new, we may also become interested and curious about it.
For example, if my friends start a new hobby and have a conversation with me, I have to listen about that hobby.
>> For example, if my friends start a new hobby and talk to me about it, I naturally listen to their stories about that hobby.
And, for having more talking with my friends, I should know about it.
>> And to have more conversations with my friends, I should know something about it.
This situation make us to be interest.
>> This situation can make us interested in it as well.
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