Do you agree that there are a lot of misinformation and inaccurate advice on social media these days
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I agree with there are a lot of misinformation and inaccurate advice on social media these days.
Few years ago, some people were hooked on raising their childrens having some desease without taking a medicine and going to hospitals.
The owner of cafe was a korea medicine doctor. So the viewers were beliving his advice and trusting written suggestions without any suspections. Forexample, The owner asked people to follow untested ways to the parents having a baby with serious burn skin.
As a result the baby was getting worse and worse. Although the owner was accused and the certification of korea medicine doctor was deprived, the victims wouldn`t remove the bad memories. To prevent making a similiar example the office workers have to manage and control it.
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Hello [이름] [이름]. Thank you for this. Proper education and awareness is really necessary.
- T. Beth
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>>>> I agree that there are a lot of misinformation and inaccurate advice on social media these days.
Few years ago, some people were hooked on raising their childrens having some desease without taking a medicine and going to hospitals.
>>>> Few years ago, some people were hooked to raising their children having some diseases without taking medication or going to hospitals.
The owner of cafe was a korea medicine doctor.
>>>> The owner of the cafe was a Korean medicine doctor.
So the viewers were beliving his advice and trusting written suggestions without any suspections.
>>>> So the viewers believed his advice and trusted written suggestions without any doubt.
For example, The owner asked people to follow untested ways to the parents having a baby with serious burn skin.
>>>> For example, the owner asked people to follow untested treatment for babies with serious skin burns.
As a result the baby was getting worse and worse.
>>>> correct
>>>> OR: As a result, the baby\'s condition got worse.
Although the owner was accused and the certification of korea medicine doctor was deprived, the victims wouldn`t remove the bad memories.
>>>> Although the owner was accused or cri[이름]al acts and his license was revoked, the victims would still do his wrong teachings.
To prevent making a similiar example the office workers have to manage and control it.
>>>> To prevent making a similar mistake, the office workers have to manage and control it.
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