Do you agree that violators of this law (nonlittering in natioanal parks) should be registered with
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Some people say that putting violators in jail or giving them a criminal sentence is the most effective way to make people obey instructions. However, if the government strongly proceed this sanction, ironically the police would be busy to block many protesters.
I think a warning sign is enough to let people recognize that littering is not allowed in national parks. Because majority of people living these days sympathize with preserving mother nature and they also acknowledge it belongs to own our duty, not anyone else\'s. It is possible there are some people not agree with the idea. But to control these people by force like registering with the police might cause a negative effect like riots or protests.
Therefore, education, campaign, and public advertisement is the best way to encourage people not to throw their trash in national parks.
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Hi there, [이름]!
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Some people say that putting violators in jail or giving them a criminal sentence is the most effective way to make people obey instructions.
>> OR: Hardliners would argue that incarcerating or imposing a criminal sentence on convicted offenders is the most effective measure to make people comply with laws or regulations.
However, if the government strongly proceed this sanction, ironically the police would be busy to block many protesters.
>> However, if the government strictly imposed this sanction, ironically, the police would be too busy blocking protesters.
I think a warning sign is enough to let people recognize that littering is not allowed in national parks. Because majority of people living these days sympathize with preserving mother nature and they also acknowledge it belongs to own our duty, not anyone else\'s.
>> To my way of thinking, putting up warning signs is a sufficient notification to people about nonlittering in national parks because majority of us hope to preserve mother nature, and we also acknowledge that this is our duty, not anyone else\'s.
It is possible there are some people not agree with the idea. But to control these people by force like registering with the police might cause a negative effect like riots or protests.
>> It is highly likely that there are some people who would not agree with this idea. Be that as it may, forcing them to register with the police might cause a negative effect, such as riots or protests.
Therefore, education, campaign, and public advertisement is the best way to encourage people not to throw their trash in national parks.
>> Therefore, education, campaign, and public advertisement are the best ways to encourage people not to throw their trash in national parks.
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