Do you agree with same sex parenting?

2020-03-24 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

학생이 쓴 원문

I didn’t know what is the same sex parenting so, I searched on the internet and it means that a couple of homosexual bring up children. Is is right? I think it is good to children don’t have parents. First, I think it is better than no having parents. Recently, I touched something that ‘ I need my mother when I was teenager, 20’s and 30’s.’ I agreed with this saying. Parents is like a column which can rest and lean on because they are always on my side. Everyone need parents. Second, they can also love their children. They don’t need different way to love their children with other general couples. Some people worried that children may have confusion like gender identity. However, I think it is better not to be loved. So, if they can love and bring up well to adopted children, they are also qualified to be parents. Therefore, I agree with same sex parenting.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Se [이름]!
~Teacher Lucy 

I think it is good to children don’t have parents.
>>I think it is good to children who don’t have parents.
First, I think it is better than no having parents. 
>>First, I think it is better than having no parents. 
Recently, I touched something that ‘ I need my mother when I was teenager, 20’s and 30’s.’ 
>>CORRECT!
I agreed with this saying. 
>>CORRECT!
Parents is like a column which can rest and lean on because they are always on my side. 
>>CORRECT!
Everyone need parents. 
>>CORRECT!
Second, they can also love their children. 
>>CORRECT!
They don’t need different way to love their children with other general couples. 
>>CORRECT!
Some people worried that children may have confusion like gender identity.
>>CORRECT!
 However, I think it is better not to be loved. 
>>CORRECT!
So, if they can love and bring up well to adopted children, they are also qualified to be parents.
>>CORRECT!
Therefore, I agree with same sex parenting.
>>CORRECT!

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