Do you agree with the saying \"Health is Wealth\"? If yes, could you explain why?
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Health is our greatest wealth.
>> CORRECT
Because there is not much we can achieve if we are not healthy.
>> There is not much we can achieve if we are not healthy.
This is true of both mental and physical health.
>> CORRECT
Planning is important to achieve something.
>> Planning is important in achieving something.
If you are mentally unhealthy, you will set the wrong plan and direction.
>> If you are mentally unhealthy, you may set the wrong plan and direction.
This could be the case for everyone.
>> CORRECT
Even if you set the right direction and plan, it is very difficult to proceed with the work on your own if you are physically unhealthy.
>> Even if you set the right direction and plan, it can be very difficult to proceed with work on your own if you are physically unhealthy.
Of course, you can do it with the help of others, but there are many difficulties.
>> Of course, you can do it with the help of others, but it may come with many difficulties.
Today\'s wealth is evaluated by the possession of money, but if you are unhealthy, it is difficult to maintain wealth.
>> Wealth today is often measured by the possession of money, but if you are unhealthy, it can be difficult to maintain it.
If you are healthy, you have the potential to achieve anything, so you are a person of true wealth.
>> If you are healthy, you have the potential to achieve anything and are truly wealthy.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.