Do you always do what you want? Why or why not?

2024-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Demi

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I think that I do what I want after thinking once more and doing my assignment. First, I want to buy beautiful clothes and my favorite singer\'s goods. But, I am not doing part-time job and my parents give me allowance. So, I have to reduce unnecessary spending and think again what I really want. Second, If I want to take a rest or [이름]g out with my friend, I must finish my assignment or homework first. I think that I can [이름]g out with my friend any time but my assinment has deadline. So I think about what is more important for me.

강사 첨삭

Hello Nicole,
You did a wonderful job. Keep on writing and you will get better with your English writing skill! :)
~ T. Demi ^^

I think that I do what I want after thinking once more and doing my assignment.

>> I think I do what I want after I reconsider and finish my homework.

First, I want to buy beautiful clothes and my favorite singer\'s goods.

>>CORRECT!

But, I am not doing part-time job and my parents give me allowance.

>> I do not do part-time jobs because my parents give me an allowance.

So, I have to reduce unnecessary spending and think again what I really want.

>> So, I have to reduce unnecessary spending and reconsider what I really want.

Second, If I want to take a rest or [이름]g out with my friend, I must finish my assignment or homework first.

>> CORRECT!

I think that I can [이름]g out with my friend any time but my assinment has deadline.

>> I think I can [이름]g out with my friends anytime, but my assignment has a deadline.

So I think about what is more important for me.

>> So, I still think about what is more important for me.

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