Do you always use mobil phone?
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Dear [Name],
Of course, I use mobil phone everyday.
I use Kakao talk application. as I know, a lot of Korean use it.
Some company use this application to communicate their staffs. but this application has a fault. Senior person send a message after finishing work. so many people think, it is bad situation to work continuously.
As I said, I am a director in a company. so a few years ago, I sent a message to my staffs. I thouht that was my mistakes.
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Here are your corrections:
Of course, I use mobil phone everyday.
>> Of course, I use my mobile phone everyday.
>> CORRECT
as I know, a lot of Korean use it.
>> As much as I know, a lot of Koreans use it.
Some company use this application to communicate their staffs.
>> Some company use this application to communicate with their staffs.
but this application has a fault.
>> CORRECT
Senior person send a message after finishing work. so many people think, it is bad situation to work continuously.
>> Senior people in a company send messages after working hours so many people think this is bad.
>> As I said before, I am a director in our company and a few years ago, I sent messages to my staffs.
I thouht that was my mistakes.
>> I think that was my mistake.
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