Do you always wear sunscreen when you go out to do your daily activities? Are cosmetic products you
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I don\'t wear sunscreen all the time. But when I feel like wearing, I wear. I think wearing sunscreen is hugely important. Because it protects our skin from sunlight\'s harmful elements. Also it\'s a simple manner. A few days ago, my father prescribed that his freckles have some toxicity. And the prescribtion\'s reason is about this sunscreen. He didn\'t wear sunscreen at all. So the poisonous elements permeate to his freckles. If he would wear sunscreen, its layer will protect his skin.
They are not safe to the environment totally. Recently, I have seen the youtube video which travels Hawaii. In there he tried scuba-diving. And what I saw was that the safeguard was telling him to do not wear any cosmetics either sunscreen. It\'s because of safety and longer preservation to sea animals like turtles and fishes. After I saw that video I seriously considered about the peril that the animals might had if they are accessed to the cosmetics\' hazardous chemicals.
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Hi [이름]!
Your answers are very detailed. I like when you give examples like the video you watched about the travel to Hawaii.
There, I learned that scuba divers aren\'t allowed to wear any sunscreen or cosmetics.
Thank you!
Here are the corrections.
I don\'t wear sunscreen all the time.
>> Correct!
But when I feel like wearing, I wear. I think wearing sunscreen is hugely important.
>> But, when I feel like wearing, I do. I think wearing sunscreen is very important.
Because it protects our skin from sunlight\'s harmful elements. Also it\'s a simple manner.
>> Because it protects our skin from the sunlight\'s harmful elements. Also, it\'s a simple manner.
A few days ago, my father prescribed that his freckles have some toxicity. And the prescribtion\'s reason is about this sunscreen.
>> A few days ago, my father denounce that his freckles have some toxicity. And the reason is because of his sunscreen.
He didn\'t wear sunscreen at all. So the poisonous elements permeate to his freckles.
>> He didn\'t wear sunscreen at all. So, the poisonous elements permeated to his pores causing freckles.
If he would wear sunscreen, its layer will protect his skin.
>> Correct!
They are not safe to the environment totally. Recently, I have seen the youtube video which travels Hawaii.
>> They are totally not safe to the environment. Recently, I have seen the YouTube video about traveling to Hawaii.
In there he tried scuba-diving. And what I saw was that the safeguard was telling him to do not wear any cosmetics either sunscreen.
>> There, he tried scuba-diving. And what I saw was that the safeguard was telling him not to wear any cosmetics either sunscreen.
It\'s because of safety and longer preservation to sea animals like turtles and fishes.
>> It\'s because of the safety and longer preservation of sea animals like turtles and fishes.
After I saw that video I seriously considered about the peril that the animals might had if they are accessed to the cosmetics\' hazardous chemicals.
>> After I saw that video, I seriously considered about the peril that the animals might had if they accumulated the cosmetics\' hazardous chemicals.
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