Do you believe in life after death? Why?
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Do you believe in life after death? Why?
There are many God around world. People who serve God by in their belief.
The biggest religion group is christians. Christians who believe that existence of God and the heaven and hell exist. Usually, christians think about if people do not believe Lord, they will definitely go to hell by their sins. God have been forgiven people's sins with pray for toward Lord. And when people died, God's judgement decides where dead people to go the haven or hell. In heaven they can get everything and always will be happy forever. On the other hand, in hell people will get tremendous pain forever. This is why i believe in life after death reason because i am christians. In addition, i want to go the haven.
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Hi there^^
Thank you for doing your homework^^
Very well said!
Anyway, let\'s talk more about this in our class.
I made some corrections and I hope I was able to meet your points.
See you on Monday!
~T.Chelsea
Do you believe in life after death? Why?There are many God around world. People who serve God by in their belief.
>> There are many people around the world who believe in God.The biggest religion group is christians.
>> The biggest religion group is Christian.
Christians who believe that existence of God and the heaven and hell exist.
>> Christians believe in the existance of God, heaven and hell.
Usually, christians think about if people do not believe Lord, they will definitely go to hell by their sins.
>> Usally, Chrisitans think that if people don\'t believe in the Lord they will definitely go to hell because of their sins.
God have been forgiven people\'s sins with pray for toward Lord.
>>God would forgive the sins of the people through praying to the Lord.
And when people died, God\'s judgement decides where dead people to go the haven or hell.
>> And when peole die, God\'s judgement will decide where dead people will go. It\'s either heaven or hell.
In heaven they can get everything and always will be happy forever.
>> In heaven, they can get everything and they will be happy forever.
On the other hand, in hell people will get tremendous pain forever. >> On the other hand, in hell, people will get tremendous pain forever.
This is why i believe in life after death reason because i am christians.
>> That is why I believe in life after death because I am a Christian.
In addition, i want to go the haven.
>> In addition, I want to go to heaven.
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