Do you believe in luck or do you believe that people make their own luck?
학생이 쓴 원문
I believe the latter that people make their own luck. There are a lot of chances or opportunity to get a luck in everyday life. However, To take the lucky depends on the effort, earnest heart and concern of those who want to. For example, I am not interested in traveling, but one of my friends love it. when we walk on the street, we find a poster on the wall. The poster is for a program that allows people to travel somewhere for free. My friend will apply but, I will not. As a result, my friend get the luck she want. Also, people who think just luck without their effort don\'t feel thankful the lucky and will change whether it is good or bad for me every time according to their mood.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름], Great afternoon! Thanks a lot for your effort! Keep it up!
I believe the latter that people make their own luck. >>> TEACHER JAMES
>>> CORRECT
There are a lot of chances or opportunity to get a luck in everyday life.
>>> There are a lot of chances or opportunities to get luck in everyday life.
However, To take the lucky depends on the effort, earnest heart and concern of those who want to.
>>> However, Taking the luck depends on the effort, earnest heart, and the concern of those who want to.
For example, I am not interested in traveling, but one of my friends love it.
>>> For example, I am not interested in traveling, but one of my friends loves it.
when we walk on the street, we find a poster on the wall.
>>> When we walk on the street, we find a poster on the wall.
The poster is for a program that allows people to travel somewhere for free.
>>> The poster is a program that allows people to travel somewhere for free.
My friend will apply but, I will not. As a result, my friend get the luck she want.
>>> My friend will apply but, I will not. As a result, my friend gets the luck she wants.
Also, people who think just luck without their effort don\'t feel thankful the lucky and will change whether it is good or bad for me every time according to their mood.
>>> Also, people who think just luck without their effort don\'t feel thankful for the lucky and will change whether it is good or bad for me every time according to their mood.
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