Do you believe modern lifestyles create more stress than in the past?
학생이 쓴 원문
In the past, the percentage of working mothers in South Korea was low. However, the number of working mothers is currently increasing.
As you know, working while raising children makes more stress. Women receive stress both at work and at home.
The stress can be reduced if their husbands provide more support or If the country provide more support.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! You\'re absolutely right. Yes, modern lifestyles can create more stress, but with support from family and society, this stress can be managed and reduced.
~T. Jenna
In the past, the percentage of working mothers in South Korea was low.
Correct, or
>>Historically, South Korea had a low rate of maternal workforce participation.
However, the number of working mothers is currently increasing.
Correct, or
>>However, the number of working mothers has been increasing recently.
As you know, working while raising children makes more stress.
As you know, working while raising children makes more stress.
>>As you know, working while raising children causes more stress.
Women receive stress both at work and at home.
>>Women experience stress both at work and at home.
The stress can be reduced if their husbands provide more support or If the country provide more support.
The stress can be reduced if their husbands provide more support or If the country provide more support.
>>The stress can be reduced if their husbands provide more support or if the country provides more support.
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In the past, maternal participation in the workforce in South Korea was relatively low. However, the number of working mothers has been steadily increasing in recent years. As you know, balancing work and childcare can create significant stress, as women face pressure both at home and in the workplace. This stress can be reduced when husbands provide greater support at home or when the government offers stronger resources and assistance for working families.
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