Do you believe that the rich are growing richer, and the poor are growing poorer?

2018-02-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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I believe that the rich are growing richer, and the poor are growing poorer. I have 2 reasones. First, These days information-oriented age. So, the rich have many chance to take many and good quaily information. then this information help them grow richer. Second, These days viral marketing is flourish. To make good viral marketing, people have much money to buy goods. Then the rich have many good quality goods and the public follow them. And A Cooperation give a many money to the rich to promote goods information. Then, The rich are growing richer.

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T. Jeny

I


 believe that the rich are growing richer, and the poor are growing poorer.

>>correct

I have 2 reasones.


>>I have 2 reasons.

First, These days information-oriented age.

>>First, we are in an information-oriented age these days.

So, the rich have many chance to take many and good quaily information. then this information help them grow richer.
>>So the rich have many opportunities to take and we have good quality information, thus this information helps them grow richer.
Second, These days viral marketing is flourish.

>>Secondly, viral marketing is flourishing these days.
To make good viral marketing, people have much money to buy goods.

>>To make good viral marketing, people have to have a lot of money to buy goods.

Then the rich have many good quality goods and the public follow them.

>>Then the rich have many good quality goods and the public will follow them.

And A Cooperation give a many money to the rich to promote goods information.

>>In addition, a cooperation gives a lot of money to the rich to promote good information.

Then, The rich are growing richer.

>>Thus the rich is growing richer.


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