Do you believe that the rich are growing richer, and the poor are growing poorer? Please explain.
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when i was younger, i believed money is fair and labor is sacred behavior.
because we learned important of effort and every kids book, animate, movie said that we have to try for your dream then dreams will be come true.
we believed effort never betray us
but in real world was not, we are fool, always winner is billionaire villain
first of all, i don\'t understood this situation, why they always won?
The key answer was capitalism. money earn money.
it\'s most important rule. and money rolling slope, keep over and over.
when we breathing in and out each second, it\'s getting bigger every second, like snowball.
also poor people getting more poor, their snowball still small and can\'t roll
because they have to paid for the cost of living, then they can\'t imagine to doing make financial investment. 10 years or 20 year later poor people will still poor or even more poorer.
someday we will have two choice, accepted this system and using that we are living or overthrow this system
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HAPPY MONDAY!
Interesting points again, [이름] [이름].
You\'re definitely a story teller.
I love how you\'ve illustrated your points with a snowball.
Great work!
~Teacher Eve.
when i was younger, i believed money is fair and labor is sacred behavior.
>> When I was younger, I believed that money is fair and labor is a sacred behavior.
because we learned important of effort and every kids book, animate, movie said that we have to try for your dream then dreams will be come true.
>> Because we learn that effort is important from every kids\' books, animation, and movies. We have to keep trying for our dreams to come true.
we believed effort never betray us
>> We believe that effort will never betray us.
but in real world was not, we are fool, always winner is billionaire villain
>> But in the real world, we are not fools, the winner will always be a billionaire villain.
first of all, i don\'t understood this situation, why they always won?
>> First of all, I don\'t understand this situation. Why do they always win?
The key answer was capitalism. money earn money.
>> They answer was capitalism. Money earns money.
it\'s most important rule. and money rolling slope, keep over and over.
>> It\'s the most important rule, and money rolls over and over again.
when we breathing in and out each second, it\'s getting bigger every second, like snowball.
>> When we breath in and out, it keeps getting bigger like a snowball.
also poor people getting more poor, their snowball still small and can\'t roll
>> Also, poor people are getting poorer, their snowballs are still small and can\'t roll.
because they have to paid for the cost of living, then they can\'t imagine to doing make financial investment.
>> Because they have to pay for their living expenses to the point where they can\'t make any financial investments.
10 years or 20 year later poor people will still poor or even more poorer.
>> 10 years or 20 years later, poor people will still be poor or even worse.
someday we will have two choice, accepted this system and using that we are living or overthrow this system
>> Someday, we will have two choices, to accept this system and keep using it while we\'re living or overthrow this system.
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