Do you collect anything? If so, when did you start collecting? How large is your collection?

2023-06-20 · 첨삭 강사 Caitlyn

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I think I seldomly collect something in passion nowadays. But when I was elementary school, the slap-match(ttakji) was popular among the students. So I used to buy some ttakji at the stationery store and obtain it by my friends through the match. I gathered them almost two boxes but as I grow up, those are not useful anymore. It\'s just slice of hard paper that has a character on it. Now that I\'m talking about it, I can think of the fact that I collected shopping bags or boxes received from store after I bought something. I can use them when I have to carry various things. So I feel nice if the design of the bag is in my favor. I use it clearly, no wirnkle and contamination. But these days, it is more important to use multi-use bag to protect the environment. Therefore, I try to not use the plastic or disposable bag. But it\'s a question that many company encourages people to use multi-use bag and make them more would be helpful to nature.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Ko [이름]!
Your composition was outstanding. You demonstrated a deep understanding of the topic and showcased your creativity in presenting your ideas. I agree! There are those we collect when we were young that we thought are important, but as time pass by, they become useless to us.
- T. Caitlyn 
I think I seldomly collect something in passion nowadays. 
>> I think I rarely collect something passionately nowadays.
But when I was elementary school, the slap-match(ttakji) was popular among the students. 
>> But when I was in elementary school, the slap-match (ttakji) was popular among the students.
So I used to buy some ttakji at the stationery store and obtain it by my friends through the match. 
>> So I used to buy some ttakji at the stationery store or obtain it through matches with my friends.
I gathered them almost two boxes but as I grow up, those are not useful anymore. 
>>  I gathered almost two boxes of them, but as I grew up, they became useless anymore.
It\'s just slice of hard paper that has a character on it. 
>> It\'s just a piece of hard paper that has a character on it. 
Now that I\'m talking about it, I can think of the fact that I collected shopping bags or boxes received from store after I bought something. 
>> Now that I\'m talking about it, I can think of the fact that I collected shopping bags or boxes received from stores after I bought something.
I can use them when I have to carry various things. 
>> CORRECT
So I feel nice if the design of the bag is in my favor. 
>>  CORRECT
I use it clearly, no wirnkle and contamination. 
>> I use it clearly, with no wrinkle and contamination. 
But these days, it is more important to use multi-use bag to protect the environment. 
>> But these days, it is more important to use multi-use bags to protect the environment. 
Therefore, I try to not use the plastic or disposable bag. 
>> Therefore, I try to not use plastic or disposable bags. 
But it\'s a question that many company encourages people to use multi-use bag and make them more would be helpful to nature.
>> But it\'s questionable that many companies encourage people to use multi-use bags, and making more of them can be helpful to nature.

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