Do you consider yourself as a mature person? How so?
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This is a wonderful composition!
And I also agree with you. ^^
Keep up the good work.
~~t. Ally
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I think if someone wants to be considered as a mature person, he needs to be patient.
>> I think if someone wants to be considered as a mature person, he or she needs to be patient.
He should know how to wait for things and relax himself waiting for something.
>> He or she should know how to wait for things and relax while waiting for something.
I have been working on my perseverance and patience, so I could become better person with that.
>> I have been working on my perseverance and patience, so I could become a better person.
For example, I try to endure many situations that I meet.
>> CORRECT!
Every time I choose to endure and keep improving myself, I could feel I am becoming a mature person.
>> CORRECT!
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