Do you enjoy jam-packed festivals or quiet gatherings? Why?

2026-04-15 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

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Well, it seems to depend on the situation. I really like festivals and festivals that I wanted to go to, so I understnad that people are jam-packed, but I usually enjoy quiet gatherings. Because I\'m an extrovert, I meet a lot of people in work time. So, when I have time, I keep quiet and charge my energy. In addition, I have hobbies that I go to quiet places or enjoy static hobbies such as reading a book.

강사 첨삭

Hi! 

Great job in making your essay. I truly appreciate it. I also made a few corrections to your sentences. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



Well, it seems to depend on the situation.
>> CORRECT.

I really like festivals and festivals that I wanted to go to, so I understnad that people are jam-packed, but I usually enjoy quiet gatherings.
>> I really like the festivals I’ve always wanted to go to, and I understand they will be jam-packed, but I usually enjoy quiet gatherings

Because I\'m an extrovert, I meet a lot of people in work time. 
>> Because I\'m an extrovert, I meet a lot of people during work time. 

So, when I have time, I keep quiet and charge my energy. 
>> CORRECT.

In addition, I have hobbies that I go to quiet places or enjoy static hobbies such as reading a book.
>> In addition, I have hobbies; I go to quiet places or enjoy static hobbies such as reading a book.

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