Do you enjoy live music? Have you been to any concerts? Talk about the most memorable concert that y

2020-06-03 · 첨삭 강사 Dee

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The liveliness of live music makes everyone love music. I make a reservation to go to the concert and it costs a lot. At the end of the year, there are many concerts by singers to celebrate. Our group also reserves concerts as a group, and the admission fee is paid by the membership fee. I\'ve been to several concerts, but I haven\'t paid for it. There were boring concerts, and there were concerts with excitement. I went to a concert by a middle-aged male singer, but the stage was gorgeous, unique and fresh. The singer who performed the concert sings well and is particularly attractive as a man. The concert of the day when the invited singer who came out in the middle got along well Can\'t forget Another concert was boring and I fell asleep in the concert. I was a female singer, but I silently sang for two hours without a singer. The concert that made me cry was the song of an old man who became a singer It became a sea of ​​tears with a song of a heart that portrays a mother.

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Hello Miss. [Name]! I am glad to know that you enjoy music like everyone else. Live music gives another layer of experiencing music in our lives. Cheers for more and have a good day!~~T.Dee

The liveliness of live music makes everyone love music.
>>CORRECT!
I make a reservation to go to the concert and it costs a lot.
>>CORRECT! 
At the end of the year, there are many concerts by singers to celebrate.
>>At the end of the year, there are many concerts of singers to attend.
Our group also reserves concerts as a group, and the admission fee is paid by the membership fee.
>>Our group also reserves concert tickets as a group and the admission fee is paid by the membership fee.
I\'ve been to several concerts, but I haven\'t paid for it.
>>CORRECT!
There were boring concerts, and there were concerts with excitement.
>>CORRECT!
I went to a concert by a middle-aged male singer, but the stage was gorgeous, unique and fresh.
>>I went to a concert of a middle-aged male singer but the stage design was gorgeous, unique and fresh.
The singer who performed the concert sings well and is particularly attractive as a man.
>>The singer who performed in the concert sings well and is particularly attractive as a man.
The concert of the day when the invited singer who came out in the middle got along well
>>During the concert, a guest singer came out in the middle of the crowd and it was done well.
Can\'t forget
>>It\'s unforgettable.
Another concert was boring and I fell asleep in the concert.
>>CORRECT!
I was a female singer, but I silently sang for two hours without a singer.
>>It was a concert of a female singer. I silently sang for two hours without the singer.
The concert that made me cry was the song of an old man who became a singer
>>The concert that made me cry was where an old man sang and later became a singer.
It became a sea of ​​tears with a song of a heart that portrays a mother.
>>There was a sea of tears because of his heartfelt song about a mother.

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