Do you ever read magazines or news articles about health?
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Sometimes I read some articles about health to get some information which is concerned with health.
>>> Sometimes, I read some articles about health to get some information concerning health.
The most interesting one was about the blue light.
>>> correct
Blue light is the ray which come out from monitors and cell phones.
>>> Blue light is the ray that comes out from monitors and mobile phones.
The specific light harms our eyes and make us more stressful.
>>> The specific light harms our eyes and makes us more stress.
I was interested in the news because I used to work with a mobil and a laptop till late nights.
>>> I was interested in the news because I used to work with a gadget company until late at night.
The article said we need to avoid the blue light as far as possible.
>>> correct
And to avoid the damage of our eyes, we should take a special glasses.
>>> And in order to avoid damage to our eyes, we should take a special glasses.
Besides, we should do not watch through monitors for a long time as well.
>>> We should also avoid watching through monitors for long periods of time.
I don\'t think all the information in the article is truth.
>>> I don\'t think all the information in the article is a fact.
The news makes us buy the special protecting glasses as well.
>>> The news make us buy the special glasses to protect our eyes.
But we need to think about it once.
>>> But we need to think about it first.
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