Do you ever read magazines or news articles about health?

2019-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Lainey

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Sometimes I read some articles about health to get some information which is concerned with health. The most interesting one was about the blue light. Blue light is the ray which come out from monitors and cell phones. The specific light harms our eyes and make us more stressful. I was interested in the news because I used to work with a mobil and a laptop till late nights. The article said we need to avoid the blue light as far as possible. And to avoid the damage of our eyes, we should take a special glasses. Besides, we should do not watch through monitors for a long time as well. I don\'t think all the information in the article is truth. The news makes us buy the special protecting glasses as well. But we need to think about it once.

강사 첨삭

Hi Su ^^


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T. Lainey <\",)))><


Sometimes I read some articles about health to get some information which is concerned with health.

>>> Sometimes, I read some articles about health to get some information concerning health.


 The most interesting one was about the blue light.

>>> correct


 Blue light is the ray which come out from monitors and cell phones.

>>> Blue light is the ray that comes out from monitors and mobile phones.


 The specific light harms our eyes and make us more stressful.

>>> The specific light harms our eyes and makes us more stress.


 I was interested in the news because I used to work with a mobil and a laptop till late nights.

>>> I was interested in the news because I used to work with a gadget company until late at night.


 The article said we need to avoid the blue light as far as possible.

>>> correct


 And to avoid the damage of our eyes, we should take a special glasses.

>>> And in order to avoid damage to our eyes, we should take a special glasses.


 Besides, we should do not watch through monitors for a long time as well.

>>> We should also avoid watching through monitors for long periods of time.


 I don\'t think all the information in the article is truth.

>>> I don\'t think all the information in the article is a fact.


 The news makes us buy the special protecting glasses as well.

>>> The news make us buy the special glasses to protect our eyes.


But we need to think about it once.

>>> But we need to think about it first.

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