Do you ever want to have your own cafe? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I do. When I take stress in my job, I hope to have my own cafe. Working my job I want to avoid from persons that give the stress to me.
But, The reason that I give up to have my own cafe is simple. Because having my own cafe is too dangerous. The normal salary man is more easy and comportable.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for doing your homework!
~T. Divina^^
Here are some things to take note of:
1. Yes, I do. When I take stress in my job, I hope to have my own cafe.
>>Yes, I do. When I\'m stressed with my job, I hope to have my own cafe.
2. Working my job I want to avoid from persons that give the stress to me.
>>When I do my job, I want to avoid the people that stress me out.
3. But, The reason that I give up to have my own cafe is simple.
>>But the reason that I give up having my own cafe is simple.
4. Because having my own cafe is too dangerous.
>>Having my own cafe is too dangerous. (*you may also use the word \'risky\' instead of \'dangerous\')
5. The normal salary man is more easy and comportable.
>>Being a normal salaryman is easier and more comfortable.
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